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My recount of Cadburys World

May13

Firstly, we made a line by Miss Drake and went outside ( in the sun) to check that the double deker was outside the school. Next we went on the coach, also I was really lucky because my seat was really cumfy as a pillow. Also, I sat next to my friend Harriet. To get to Cadburys world, it takes 3 quaters of an our to get there. When we got to our destination, quikley, we were splitted up into sevrel groups. Before we went to the 4D cimema , we had 15 minites on the lay area. As we went passed the cinema, we were told that we were going to a presentation called bean to bar. A lady talked her way through, about how you make chocolate products. After that, it was are lunch time. I loved my food, I was delighted! Then we had a little tour around the factory including: A car ride and a photo shoot! After that, we went to the gift shop and I bought a book about chocolate and a dairy milk bar. Finally, it was time to go back to school. I had a really extrordanairy day with my friends!

 

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“My recount of Cadburys World”

  1. May 13th, 2015 at 5:41 pm      Reply Mr Sutton Says:

    Thank you for sharing your recount of your trip to Cadbury World. I wish I could have gone on such a cool school trip when I was at school. You have used lots of excellent connectives in your writing making your writing really clear, but have a look at your opening sentence. Does it introduce your audience to the trip? Or are you launching straight into your recount? It’s always a good idea to set the scene so that visitors to your blog know what you are writing about.


  2. June 26th, 2015 at 9:16 am      Reply Hayley17 Says:

    +I really like your Punctuation
    ->maybe you could write some more
    ?what was your favriout bit and why


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